Dana Aburabi
student
Jordan University of Science and Technology
Jordan
Architecture
The project is students housing with take in consider their sports commercial and entertainment facilities. site of project between two universities in… more
Bakhtiar Amir
advisor
MARA University of Technology (UiTM), Faculty of Architecture, Planning and Surveying, Department of Architecture, Shah Alam, Selangor, Sri Iskandar, Perak
Malaysian
Urban design/ Community Empowerment more
Dear Ms Dana Aburabi,
Congratulations on your submission. I enjoyed reading through the project descriptions, and how the narration creates a sequence of scenes imagined through the journey of spaces as elaborated. These transects of experiential sequence can evoke different emotions by means of the play of sensual attributes as you explained, from the smell of coffee, sound of water and human play etc. I am assuming the thoughts when the spatial expressions were done when we were experiencing global lockdowns since for the most part, there were close to no humans shown in the illustrations. Its always more expressive to elaborate the words used to narrate the spaces/journey via graphical means. Afterall, the humane aspects of the proposal, and how people respond to the architecture is what makes the proposal communicable. Looking at the graphic skill you have, im positive that it is something easily achievable. Also, a layout plan indicating where the spaces are in relation to the perspectives shown would also help to mentally navigate through the journey of spaces. All the best Dana!
Bakhtiar Amir
Dear Bakhtiar Amir,Thank you for your feedback, really it was useful,and made me happy.